Enclosed by an unknown darkness
Scared, breathing heavily and watery eyed
I close my eyes
A sudden lurch of heart
Panting like a marathon runner
Struggling to keep up
Fighting against all odds
Dryness fast taking over my mouth
Suffocating, a deep sigh escapes from deep within
Running in the unknown land
Among known strangers
I pace up
The need to arrive somewhere
Where to remains unknown
Tiny droplets of water
Falling in symphony
As I open my eyes, scared
Enclossed by an unknown darkness
Scared,breathing heavily and watery eyed
The void seeps in
Taking over my entire being
As I stand alone
In the midst of known strangers...
Wednesday, August 22, 2007
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19 comments:
[whew] so i am the first one to comment...
hehehe
hey this is a superb poem. i loved it... so close to heart..
Hi,
Thanks a lot for the kind remarks ashish... :)
make that 'seeps'. Will u, dear ?
Oh! I actually liked the poem....forget the little glitch that caught my eye.
To what's in a name- Thanx ..both for pointing out the glitch as well as the comment. Will make the change...
brilliantly writteen
carry on ..........
nice poem satan queen.. very well written..
I loved it especially the last line
'As I stand alone in the midst of known strangers'
thanks.. gal for ur comments..
hey put up ur pic.. wanna see if u really have horns.. :P
hmmmm...
such a poem from someone named 'satan queen' ??
irony??
:P
good writing though..
Very profound...It has always been a pleasure reading your posts
whts up?? no new posts since long time..
very devika-ish...keep up d gud work
too bad.. u dnt have horns.. lol :p
ya keep posting wud check in l8r.. bye tc..
wats that 1162 in the id for anyways??
licence plate no.??
:P
lolz..nah...wierd story behind it..one of my goof ups!...was making an account wid my name...just kept on clicking "nexT" coz i was too fed up of the entire process...n gmail suggested couple of oder names for openin the account..ended up clickin next...n finally..got dis id wid dis weird no.! hey but "11" iz my birth date..so lil significance..n 62...well..i mite jst be 62!!!! :p
God one. Liked the style. And i magery. Keep it rollin;)
close to heart n true for everyone who want to make a place of their under the sun...
nice poem...
unknown strangers, all over the place.
nowhere to run,
nowhere to hide,
the wind too is against your stride
my mortal self fears,
faith disappears
but its more than what i thought,
coz now i wish i had rather died.
this one reminded me of a song by linkin park...and also of a short poem I read once which goes like this -:
My sleep is unreal, my dream is my life embedded in illusions
searching for the answer... to understand my life
What I see is weaved from my heart;
emotions that I never felt before
Flames of water, seas of fire, a darkened sun and a burning moon
Red painted heaven, white painted ravens, whispering trees and burning seas
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